NOVEL INTRO REVISITED: WHICH WORKS BETTER AND WHY?

So I'm rewriting chapter one of my novel, Red Star Sheriff, and I'm curious, which opener do you think works better? The original? Or the rework? I'm trying to be more descriptive but I'm curious if a shorter, more into it sequence is preferable versus the more visually descriptive work. If you have an opinion, … Continue reading NOVEL INTRO REVISITED: WHICH WORKS BETTER AND WHY?